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Sholio ([personal profile] sholio) wrote2007-01-22 08:28 am

"Long Road Home" vignette

That meme thing -- [livejournal.com profile] atlantis_fan requested a post-Long Road Home vignette. I mulled over an idea while lying in bed this morning, and when I got up, this is what I wrote. It's a little bit cute and a little bit sad.




The sheep were Teyla's idea.

John's savings were starting to run low, and of all of them -- Teyla, Ronon, Melena and their two kids -- he was the only one who could legally work. Rodney didn't count, since he was only occasionally there.

Teyla had been trying to talk him into sheep for over a year. The ranch was already set up to raise animals; they'd hardly have to do anything. She said that the sheep would feed themselves on the grass in the high pastures, and then she and Melena could spin the wool into cloth to sell to tourists.

John had waved a hand at the rocks. "What tourists? There aren't any within a hundred miles of here."

"Your country is full of tourists. They must be somewhere."

Ultimately he figured it would probably come to nothing, but Teyla had talked Ronon and Melena around to her side, and he figured that going along with it was the path of least resistance. Besides, when he thought about it, he started thinking it sounded like fun. He'd never really been anywhere near a farm as a kid. Now he owned one. Teyla and Melena kept a vegetable garden, and they had a couple of cats -- strays that Rodney had picked up in D.C. and brought back with him -- but otherwise, they probably did need some more livestock to give the place that suitable Texan ambiance.

Like most simple ideas, it turned out to be complicated. The ancient fencing around the pastures was sagging and falling down. He and Ronon and Teyla spent countless hours replacing and repairing fence posts in the scorching sun, re-stringing rusty barbed wire and trying not to pick up tetanus. Then John got a couple of books on animal husbandry and discovered how many things could kill sheep.

"Damn things die if you look at 'em funny!"

Teyla leaned over his shoulder, reading. She had picked up written English as if born to it; the only thing that still seemed to give her trouble was the occasional spoken contraction. "Only your American sheep," she informed him proudly. "In my village, the flocks lived off the land for months at a time. They were only rounded up to be sheared. They did not need your antibiotics and vaccinations and special feed supplements and such."

"Yes, but American sheep is what we're going to have to get."

It also turned out that no one for hundreds of miles around them raised sheep. There seemed to be quite a few cattle ranches, but sheep? Not so much. John ended up having to drive to the city to find someone who could sell him a few lambs.

Still, it was worth it for the look on Teyla's face when he and Ronon showed up with a dozen feces-smeared lambs huddled in the back of the truck.

Half of them died immediately, largely through their caretakers' inexperience. They lost one to coyotes, two in a rainstorm when the flock became separated, one that escaped through a hole in the fence and was never seen again, and so forth. But the others thrived, and John discovered that he really liked this.

Sitting on a sun-warmed rock overlooking the pasture and watching the half-grown animals graze, he wondered what Rodney would have to say about it the next time he showed up. Rodney could never seem to resist the lure of D.C. and whatever it was he did for the government there. He'd vanish for months and eventually turn up back at the ranch, broken in ways John could never quite pin down. Then he'd stay until his eyes started to lose that lost look, and he'd be gone again.

It had been almost a year this time, John realized, the longest he'd ever been gone. If he didn't show up soon, it might be necessary to go up to D.C. and drag him down here. When Rodney stayed away for a long time, it was like he lost a little bit of whatever made him Rodney -- the quick humor, the flashes of compassion that showed when you expected them least. He rebounded slowly while staying at the ranch, but a little more slowly every time he came.

It was time to get him back.

John wandered back to the house. There were a stack of postcards propped on a windowsill that Melena had picked up in town. None of them had anyone to write to, but she had liked the pictures. There weren't any with sheep, so John picked out one that showed a rolling landscape of red hills, and, on the back, scribbled down the address of the mail drop that Rodney had given them in D.C.

He didn't write much. There was no need. "R- Got sheep? J." Rodney could never resist a puzzle.

[identity profile] atlantis-fan.livejournal.com 2007-01-22 06:09 pm (UTC)(link)
I liked this! :O) Though I'm a little sad for Rodney wondering what's hurting him in D.C....

He's going to make it back to the Ranch and be okay right?

And and do the sheep work out??

And can you tell I want more? *snicker*

Seriouly though this works wonderfully as a snippet from the AU and I like it as it is and you don't need to add more ...

yeah...
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:32 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :)

*laughs* I've got everybody worried about poor Rodney! I guess the idea that I was working with here is that he can't give up the lure of science (I mean, really, can you see Rodney being happy on a farm?) and the government keeps dangling large sums of money and private labs and cutting-edge technology in front of him -- but what they have him doing, when he's working for them, is building WMDs and the like. And he has major, major problems with the ethics of it. John, of course, doesn't know all the details.

That's the backstory.

Now what they have to do is get him to STOP.

And I kinda want to write more too ... I just love the idea of all of them living on a ranch in the middle of nowhere.

[identity profile] atlantis-fan.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:39 am (UTC)(link)
Ah! Now I get it. Yeah they really need to get Rodney out of that situation and fast.

And I kinda want to write more too ... I just love the idea of all of them living on a ranch in the middle of nowhere.

Please!!!! and I'm sure there's a university somewhere nearby that's in need of someone with Rodney's knowlage! *nods*
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:44 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah they really need to get Rodney out of that situation and fast.

And another part of the problem is that, being Rodney, he won't ask for help or tell them what's going on.

Now I've got myself feeling sorry for the poor guy....

[identity profile] atlantis-fan.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 01:01 am (UTC)(link)
They'll figure it out though won't they? And make it all better?

Seriously though I think you have the perfect set up here for it being fixed (or at least starting too) - he's been gone the longest he's ever been and they might need to go get him so I can see this being the turning point. And he doesn't have to tell them everything - they can just figure out that what ever he's doing needs to stop... or something...

[identity profile] tipper-green.livejournal.com 2007-01-22 06:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, you know this can't be all of it! You can't tantalize us with the idea that he's been away a whole *year* and we don't know why! Or maybe, we don't need to know why, per se, but...

Okay. It's Monday. I'm feeling demanding (blame the job - I got in to about a half dozen demanding emails). More! I want more! LOL!
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:35 am (UTC)(link)
*grin* I've gone and tantalized people without meaning to!

See my answer above as to where Rodney goes when he's not on the ranch and why it depresses him so badly.

Ultimately he's going to have to give it up because it's destroying him, but he's come to see it as an either/or choice (between doing science for the government vs. not doing it at all) without considering possible compromises, such as working for a university or the like ... and damn it, now I want to write this!

[identity profile] tipper-green.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 04:07 am (UTC)(link)
It's a vicious circle...

I'll just call you Dorothy Parker from now on. You know, you could always...oh my God...I'm watching the 11:00 news and there's a fire at my old high school! Sure, I haven't been back there in fourteen years, but still! Holy crap! This is surreal...

Heh. Sorry. Back now. To be honest, the school was built in the 70s, in the "big gray blocks 'o cement are beautiful" era (the poor man's marble? My ass), and could use an upgrade. Still, sorta sad.

What was I talking about?

OH! yes, the story! (You're not supposed to be watching TV and commenting at the same time are you?). I was just going to say, you could always write it in bibs and bobs. A little bit here, a little bit there...never quite formulating a full story. I wonder how it would turn out?

Oh, I'm just so distracted. It's also snowing. It's snowing and there's a fire. And I'm totally digressing and should stop writing now.
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-24 03:22 am (UTC)(link)
Ah, it's nice to know I'm not the only one who does the computer-and-TV thing! *laughs* And yeah, I might do more vignettes and sort of piece it together; there is an appeal in doing it that way. I just have too many long stories going right now to add another to the mix!

[identity profile] thady.livejournal.com 2007-01-22 07:04 pm (UTC)(link)
I liked this! Wonder about Rodney though. I hope you can be persuaded to write more.

You know, I was pretty satisfied with the ending of "Long Road Home" but know that you've written more I want more. That's not fair.. *G*

But seriously, wonderful snippet, even if there won't be more.
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:37 am (UTC)(link)
*grin* See my answers above to explain the Rodney thing (at least where I was coming from when I wrote this).

I didn't mean to tantalize people quite so badly when I wrote this, although I realize I've gone and tantalized *myself* now too ... because I'm curious about what happens next, as well.

I guess the whole point of the exercise was to make me start writing again, and it worked!

[identity profile] atlantis-fan.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:41 am (UTC)(link)
I didn't mean to tantalize people quite so badly when I wrote this,

but it's RODNEY! You can't have him be hurting and expect people take it without wanting him to be all better!!!!! *sniffles* ;o)
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:50 am (UTC)(link)
*laughs* True ...

You know, even though I hate the characterization of Victim!Rodney (I mean, not as he is here, but as a big wobbly pile of woe the way he's sometimes written) I can sort of see where it comes from, because there is something so irresistible -- to me at least -- about Rodney when he's hurting. You just want so desperately to make him better...

[identity profile] atlantis-fan.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:58 am (UTC)(link)
Actually I have that same problem! :O) I think it's all a matter of finding the right balence - just enough angst that can be easly fixed without going overboard with it. Problem is so many authors don't know when enough is enough.

You just want so desperately to make him better...

Oh yes... and sometimes John makes me feel the same way too.
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[personal profile] leesa_perrie 2007-01-27 10:56 pm (UTC)(link)
I have a few AUs in the works that might be accused of having Victim!Rodney in, but I always qualify why he is like he is, and try to bring him to a place closer to our Rodney before leaving him. And a big wobbly pile of woe is probably an overstatement, so maybe they waren't so bad - if I EVER get them finished, that is!! And they are AUs, after all. If it's a canon story, I do try and write in a canon way, but sometimes the old angst bunny runs away with me and I write John and Rodney a little too sharing of emotions. Oh well...

There's something just so vulnerable about Rodney, it's hard to keep the snark there sometimes!!

[identity profile] atlantis-fan.livejournal.com 2007-01-27 11:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Well to be fair what I consider "going overboard" does depend somewhat on my mood. Somedays I can deal with more angst and other days I don't want any of it. *shrug*

And also a lot of my feelings about angst and when it's to much comes from past experences in other fandoms and basically being burned out by all the angst - so I'm a bit more sensitive to it than most I figure. So I don't think I'm all that objective about how much angst is to much.
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-28 09:10 pm (UTC)(link)
I think the thing that bothers me mainly is when people have Sheppard being abusive towards Rodney and Rodney just taking it. I don't mind seeing hurt/vulnerable Rodney in fanfics (okay, yes, I have this squooshy weakness for seeing him that way -- and I think that's one of the things I like about your stories) but there are so many writers who portray John as a total jerk and Rodney as a doormat and .... that's just ... so utterly WRONG on so many levels.

(Anonymous) 2007-01-23 12:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Hah, good! :) Perhaps you'll really write more. And the explanation of what happened to Rodney makes a lot of sense. Now they only need to pull him out of it. *nods* It's good to have friends who'd do that for you.

[identity profile] thady.livejournal.com 2007-01-23 12:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Duh, that was me. Forgot to log in.
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-24 03:20 am (UTC)(link)
*grin* Yeah. His friends would be willing to go to bat for him; I'm just not sure if he believes it.

[identity profile] recycledfunk.livejournal.com 2007-01-24 04:14 am (UTC)(link)
I finally got an account so now I can comment :). I loved "The Long Road Home" and I was pleasantly surprised to see a vignette for it! The thought of the gang on a sheep farm makes me smile. You do, however, have me worried about Rodney. He needs his friends to keep him centered and grounded.
You will keep us posted, right? And I hope you don't mind that I've friended you (sounds so creepy & stalkerish!) so I can keep up with updates. And watch you from the bushes... ;)
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-25 05:43 pm (UTC)(link)
*grin* No, I don't mind being friended! And thank you for the kind words! I'm a little worried about Rodney myself. I should write another vignette or two, and let them save him. :)
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More, more, more

[personal profile] leesa_perrie 2007-01-25 01:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, you can't leave it there...I want more!!! I absolutely adore this AU of yours and I'm desparate for more of it...please!!

And as a writer, I should know better than to plead...but I'm doing it anyway!!!
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Re: More, more, more

[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-01-25 05:37 pm (UTC)(link)
*grin* I'm sort of wooed by the idea of writing more myself. They need to go rescue poor Rodney from D.C. ...

And thanks! :)

Re: More, more, more

[identity profile] parisntripfan.livejournal.com 2007-01-29 01:28 am (UTC)(link)
Lord help D.C. (or more generally the D.C. Metro Area then if that crew is coming up to help Rodney.

[identity profile] pentapus.livejournal.com 2007-01-31 02:21 pm (UTC)(link)
Ok, so this is awesome. When I saw the timestamp meme my first thought was of the Long Road Home. Loved, loved Teyla's problem with contractions, her opinions on American sheep and tourism. And John, discovering animal husbandry. The obvious solution to Rodney's trouble is to commute to UT Austin, where I'm sure he could have convinced me to quit the physics major years earlier.
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-04-09 01:38 am (UTC)(link)
Okay, so I'm surpassing all previous set standards of lateness for replying to feedback here, but thank you so much! ^_^ And I just wrote another vignette (http://friendshipper.livejournal.com/60814.html) as a follow-up to this one; actually it was going back to check the URL on this one that made me realize I never responded to your feedback. *smacks forehead* Thank you, and sorry about the lateness!
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[personal profile] naye 2007-08-05 08:19 am (UTC)(link)
Aww! John has a family! ♥ And sheep! (Go Teyla! Sheep aren't too smart, but they're useful, and can be very friendly.) And stray cats that Rodney picks up in DC - I adore that in so many ways. Rodney picking up strays. And then straying himself, and John worries, and - oh. I worry! But John will get him back. Back home. ...I get warm fuzzies from that thought, from the thought of John's place being home, for all of them. ♥
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-11-23 07:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, I never answered this! (Catching up on old feedback.) Thanks for the comment. ♥

[identity profile] katriel1987.livejournal.com 2007-11-23 06:55 pm (UTC)(link)
Ah sheep...we used to take in orphaned ones and bottle-feed them. I am convinced that sheep are suicidal: ours found new ways to die every time we turned around. The sheep sections of this made me smile, and I love how you intertwined them with the sadness of what's going on with Rodney. Now I'm off to read the sequel. :)

(By the way, you grew up in rural Alaska? That's awesome. And it explains why you love wilderness and you're so good at describing landscapes.)
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2007-11-23 07:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Heh. We never had sheep, but this was our general experience with all the other farm animals that we tried to raise. Suicidal, indeed. Thanks!

... and yes, rural Alaska; I love writing about lonely rural places, and the landscapes in some of my stories are drawn from places I've been.

[identity profile] secondsilk.livejournal.com 2009-01-25 10:50 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm so glad Ronon and Melena made it there at it's all working out. I love the first fic, the way they found each other (and I did think that it couldn't possible be team without Ronon).
John does know how to lure Rodney back - for Rodney's own sake, of course.
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2010-08-16 10:01 pm (UTC)(link)
For Rodney's own sake, of course! *g* I'm glad you enjoyed it; thanks!
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[identity profile] sobelle.livejournal.com 2010-08-15 11:33 pm (UTC)(link)
I missed this the first time around... I'm figuring that Rodney will have exotic sheep (the ones that Teyla spoke of) shipped to them one of these days.

(re-read The Long Road Home today while our internet connection was down and enjoyed it all over again... glad that I'd saved it to my hard drive favorites... and glad that they all found each other... and that John is still kick ass dangerous) =)
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2010-08-16 10:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :D I'm very glad you enjoyed it ... both times around! (There's also another sequel snippet here (http://friendshipper.livejournal.com/60814.html#cutid1) -- not sure if you found that one too.)
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[personal profile] saphirablue 2010-09-10 09:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow! Somehow I really like the picture of John being a shepherd (no pun intended).

Thank you for this ficlet! :)
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[identity profile] friendshipper.livejournal.com 2010-09-11 05:03 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :) Heh, I hadn't really thought about the shepherd thing ...