As much as I enjoy stories in which the team all adore one another, the relationship you outline here is probably a lot closer to canon-accurate. I love the way Rodney seizes the chance to say the things he needs but doesn't want to say (and his recognition that it's best to quit while he's behind -- my favorite line), as well as Ronon's ability to move on and not dwell on a grudge. (Also, to trip a passerby -- hee!)