goldstar ([identity profile] insight2.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sholio 2007-01-03 03:33 am (UTC)

This was good fic, very meaty on the relationships that John has with his team and good descriptions of the planet they're on. I did wince a lot at the violence between John and Ronon but it was very IC with the plot you had. I did have a question about a knife here:

Ronon immediately flicked the knife over and plunged it into Sheppard's wrist.

I was very distracted throughout the rest of the fic because I don't think you talked anymore than that about how painful that wound would've been- maybe it's me, though?


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